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Post by Taido on Feb 13, 2011 15:35:10 GMT -5
- Taido padded slowly across the territory, pausing to glance up at the wide blue sky before continuing with his walk. He didn't go much farther though and slid down to his side with an exhasperated moan. His side hurt from being bashed against the side of a rock while clambering out of the river days ago and he was exhausted, besides, Ame had died in the frantic swim. He squeezed his eyes shut, flattening his ears against his skull. "Am I going to die as well?" he whispered, just as he fell asleep.
(hope I didn't make mistakes)
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Post by Xenia on Feb 13, 2011 19:34:47 GMT -5
(The only thing I can see is that you should put the RP line at the end as well. Other than that, nice job.)
-Xenia's limbs carried her constitution forward, the aphotic grove she ambled through having its only illumination from the breaks in the canopy high above her. Her lips creased at the edges as the plains came into a view, and she sped up to increase her pace to bounds, optics gazing across her domain as she did so. The feminine lupine's trot slowed, eventually halting as a form came into her orbs' view ahead. She parted her jowls to bark, then allowed them to close with an audible click as a snarl ripped from her bodice. She spoke slowly, awaking the sleeping lupine.- Salutations, trespasser. I see you have come across Elemental Wolves' territory. State your business.
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Post by Taido on Feb 14, 2011 18:22:32 GMT -5
(oh alright. And is Xenia speaking at the last line? Would you mind putting "" around your speaking sentences so its easier to understand? Sorry.)
-Taido's eyes opened wide as he woke with a start, he raised his head in surprise, staring right into the angered face of the ashen furred she-wolf. Salutations, trespasser. I see you have come across Elemental Wolves' territory. State your business. Taido slunk back wards and rose to his feet, his hackles raised slowly and he kept his head low, his body solid as stone although he was unsure how to react- hostile? Submissive? Run away maybe? Was she the only wolf in the pack? "My name," he replied after a short pause, "is Taido. As for my business I'm a lone wolf. I was separated from my pack a while ago, and I've been alone for some days." It was partially a lie, and he didn't tell the whole story, this wolf didn't need to know. Evenly he replied, "and what about you?"-
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Post by Xenia on Feb 17, 2011 20:29:56 GMT -5
(I'll lock this since you're leaving the pack, although I can unlock it if you ever wish to re-join.)
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